This is a lovely attempt, do not let the rating distress you. We are all here to improve and move forward.
I would like to start off by saying that you are a talented artist, I have looked through your gallery and I know without a doubt that you will improve greatly with each piece you do.
I will narrow down each area so we can discuss the flaws and ways to fix them up; as well as some tricks and tips.
When drawing anything, you need to know at least the basic anatomy of it's original form depicted. Meaning if you were to draw; in this case a human but in your own style or a style such as Anime here. You will need to know the basics of natural human anatomy, and it will help greatly with proportioning as well as detailing a piece. This goes for anything you draw, from people to animals and even objects. Which is why jumping straight into a style such as Anime is not a good idea until the basic knowledge is there for human anatomy.
For the head structure it looks rather flawed. So to fix this, when drawing next time begin with the basic drawing guides so to speak. Circles, lines, squares, etc. Basic shapes and they will help form a rough skeleton so to speak and will help in the over-all forming. So when drawing next time, begin with a simple circle. It does not need to be a perfect circle, just a rough rounded shape, then follow over with the guide lines to help align the features of the face. (i.e eyes, nose, mouth, hair, etc) one straight vertical line down the center, (which the center varies depending on the positioning of the head itself.) a horizontal line near the center, another horizontal line roughly 2 inches above the middle line, and finally a last horizontal line near the top of the circle depicting the hairline; which varies depending on the size of the head but will be generally around the same area.
The vertical line will assist in keeping the features of the face in their respective places by helping you see the center of the face. The horizontal lines will assist in nose and eye positioning. Noses come in all different shapes and sizes, as do eyes. They come spaced close together, in the middle or out more it all depends on how you wish for the person to appear.
Beneath the circle you are going to want to create the jaw, and chin area.
Since this is a little easier shown than explained, and I do not know if you are more so a visual learner or by words; I sketched out a quickly little reference guide for you:
Terribly sorry about the Anime version, as you may see that is not necessarily my genre but I hope it can at least get the message through as to what it would look like roughly
I do know that eyes in the Anime genre vary in shape and size, so here I can mostly just suggest some changes really. I am not 100% sure of your vision for this girl, what her personality holds, or what her story tells. Just going by what I assume to be your original intention for the design, I would perhaps suggest some slightly more narrow eyes, or perhaps some of a broader variety. If not then perhaps tweak the left eye, it appears to be a little higher and smaller than it's right counterpart there; simple fix there though.
Now the hair seems to be rather flat, with little flow or life to it. Hair goes all the way around the head, and with a position such as this the hair would cover parts of the front and the back hair wouldn't be shown all too much.
Here is another reference sketch I have made for you:
I do hope this critique helps you out in further improving yourself, just keep working hard and never give up on your goals. If you ever need further help, feel free to note me! I will gladly help as much as I can
Keep up the great work, and I look forward to seeing more from you!
I don't write a critique often but I'll go ahead and do my best for this one.
Now, I know that the rating looks bad but fear not! I will do my best to help and critique.
The drawing does look rather unappealing to the eyes and like it was done rather quickly. It looks a lot like some of my first anime/manga-esque drawings which were done a good 3 years ago at least.
You should look up some basic 'How to' draw manga artwork tutorials. There are plenty on DeviantArt and I can even link some to you if you'd like. That is a first if you are a beginner/unsure of what you can do.
You should try to define the head and chin more. It looks very uneven and it even appears as if one of the ears is missing. If it is the 3/4th view you are going for, then you should define the cheekbone more and move everything over slightly. SO the eye far from the camera would be slightly smaller (more compact/smaller width wise) than the one closest. Also, in 3/4th view you wouldn't be able to see normal human ears.
The eyes look somewhat uneven and very basic for manga/anime-esque style. My suggestion is to explore different styles/types of eyes and try to figure out which one you like and practice on drawing them so the eyes can seem to 'pop' out more. With Anime/manga drawings, the eyes should pop out more to the viewer as the eyes are "The Window to the Soul". Of course, you don't have to make overly huge and sparkly eyes however, you should give them a little more 'umph' than this. Also, try to give more definition to the lashes and even adding some that come out on female character instead of making the outline of the eyes seemingly just a line.
The neck is too long, it really shouldn't be that long. You have it more or less correct width wise, but length wise it is too long before it would seem the shoulders connect. Look at some reference photos of people (realistic or anime/manga styled) and see what the length of the neck is.
This is pretty minor, but the ear does have shape. No matter how hard it is to get those buggers right... It isn't just a simple line or two that connects to the head. It does come away from the head and have at least a minor shape to it. Don't worry or fret if this takes you a long time to learn, it took a while for me to learn that too (and I still am). Look up some tutorials on anime/manga heads and where to place the ears and small tips on how to draw them correctly.
The hair (and this relates back to the head a bit) seems like it is glued to the head. It is very flat at the top, suggesting that the skull itself is flat at the top which it isn't. Don't worry, it took me a while to learn this as well. The hair itself also looks very stagnant and flat with no actual definition to it. Remember that the hair (especially at the top) does come away from the scalp (slightly though) and follow the contours of the head. So when the head curves, the hair does as well. The hair curves (especially around the head) and this on its own can give its own bit of definition. As far as trying to give more definition to the rest of the hair (Such as the bangs and the main length) try more sweeping lines and light lines.
Also, especially when you are beginning, Guidelines are your best friend. They can help you correctly place where the eyes, hair, ears, etc. If you don't know what some basic guidelines are, then feel free to ask me to send you some or search around for some.
Even though the rating looks bad like I said in the beginning, I'm sure you will improve with time.
I agree with the critiques, and once you sort out the proportions (which are my biggest downfall) and the placement of the features you should work on using the pen/pencil to emphasise certain areas and provide a bit more depth to the image. And then you can work on how to suggest personality with the features, expressions etc. Don’t forget, with practice comes great responsibility!! Um…that’s not quite what I meant…
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